From fb03383e087ee72139e6d1ae78879f74e0f62356 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: gentlygolden <98129032+gentlygolden@users.noreply.github.com> Date: Thu, 20 Jan 2022 15:07:32 -0800 Subject: [PATCH] Update 2018-09-12-118.md Grammatical and/or other corrections. --- _posts/2018-09-12-118.md | 100 +++++++++++++++++++-------------------- 1 file changed, 49 insertions(+), 51 deletions(-) diff --git a/_posts/2018-09-12-118.md b/_posts/2018-09-12-118.md index 2a0d35a8..d0963460 100644 --- a/_posts/2018-09-12-118.md +++ b/_posts/2018-09-12-118.md @@ -27,33 +27,33 @@ wiki_url: https://the-magnus-archives.fandom.com/wiki/MAG_118:_The_Masque ##### [INT. MAGNUS INSTITUTE, ARCHIVES] -##### [TAPE CLICKS ON.] +##### [CLICK] #### MARTIN Are you listening? -##### [He takes a deep breath.] +##### [Deep breath.] Good. -##### [We hear him flip through some files.] +##### [Flipping through files] Case, uhh, 0071304. Statement of Ivo Lensik. -##### [He breathes out again, then flicks open a lighter.] +##### [Deep inhale, lighter opening] _(your loss)_ Alright. -##### [He sets the statement alight and lets out a long breath.] +##### [Sound of paper catching fire] Statement ends, I guess. Um... -##### [He looks through some more statements.] +##### [Sounds of statement selection] Harold Silvana. 002040*6*. You'll probably do. -##### [He lights this statement aflame too. There's a clear glee in his voice as he continues; what's up with that?] +##### [Statement is set aflame. Martin sounds very pleased.] All right then. 01*4*0207. Dylan Anderson. Yeah? _(pause)_ Okay. @@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ All right then. 01*4*0207. Dylan Anderson. Yeah? _(pause)_ Okay. _(sing-song)_ There's plenty more on the pile... -##### [There's a sharp knock-knock-knock at the door. It's Elias, and he doesn't sound happy.] +##### [There's a sharp rapping at the door.] #### ELIAS @@ -101,7 +101,7 @@ I'm not going anywhere. #### MARTIN -I would hurry, though, if I were you. +I would hurry though, if I were you. ##### [TAPE CLICKS OFF.] @@ -111,7 +111,7 @@ I would hurry, though, if I were you. ##### [INT. WAXWORKS] -##### [TAPE CLICKS ON.] +##### [CLICK] ##### [There's a low, almost windy sort of constant background noise. Everyone (John, Daisy, Basira, Tim)'s voices echo a little more than usual.] @@ -143,7 +143,7 @@ I don't like it. Tough. Is this it? -#### BASIRA +#### DAISY Yeah. We plant the last of it here, and this place will go up nice. @@ -163,7 +163,7 @@ Where is everybody? #### ARCHIVIST -Preparing, I -- I guess. Haven't seen any of them since the last of, uh, whatever the hell that was went inside. +Preparing, I-I guess. Haven't seen any of them since the last of, uh, whatever the hell that was went inside. ##### [Rustling sounds.] @@ -227,9 +227,9 @@ When you were, um, kidnapped, did you leave a tape recorder here? #### ARCHIVIST -What? I don't -- I don't think so, why? Is there -- +What? I don't- I don't think so, why? Is there -- -##### [Silence as eyes go to the tape recorder.] +##### [Silence as eyes find the tape recorder.] #### ARCHIVIST @@ -241,7 +241,7 @@ Yeah. #### ARCHIVIST -For god's sake. +God's sake. #### BASIRA @@ -251,9 +251,9 @@ So where did it come from? Not important right now. -#### BASIRA +#### TIM -John, it's -- d-- +Turn it *off*. #### ARCHIVIST @@ -267,7 +267,7 @@ Yes, I'm *aware.* ##### [INT. ARCHIVES] -##### [TAPE CLICKS ON.] +##### [CLICK] ##### [Rustling of papers. A crackling begins as Martin lights another statement on fire.] @@ -335,7 +335,7 @@ _(done)_ And if you're trying to convince me otherwise, then you are failing. No #### MARTIN -Oh, sorry. Sorry, I'm not -- keeping you from the show, am I? Well -- well you head back. I'll keep myself busy here. Albrecht von Closen is next, I think. +Oh, sorry. Sorry, I'm not -- *keeping you* from the *show*, am I? Well -- well you head back. I'll keep myself busy here. Albrecht von Closen is next, I think. ##### [There may be a quiet '*oh'* in the background here.] @@ -367,7 +367,7 @@ _(cutting off)_ And I don't need to read your mind for that one. #### MARTIN -Do you really -- +Do you rea-- ##### [He cuts himself off, composes himself.] @@ -381,7 +381,7 @@ No. It's just hard to imagine that you would act on it. #### MARTIN -You think I'm what -- I'm, I'm, I'm, um, blind? +You think I'm what -- I'm, I'm, what, bluffing? #### ELIAS @@ -389,7 +389,7 @@ Oh, no. You've made that quite clear. #### MARTIN -So what? I don't get to be angry? I don't get to burn things? Just, just run around, making tea, while everyone else gets to actually have feelings? +So what? I don't get to be angry? I don't get to burn things? Just, just run around, making tea, while everyone else gets to actually have *feelings*? #### ELIAS @@ -419,7 +419,7 @@ Good. You might want to turn the tape off, Martin. -##### [TAPE CLICKS OFF.] +##### [CLICK] ------ @@ -427,6 +427,8 @@ You might want to turn the tape off, Martin. ##### [INT. WAXWORKS] +##### [CLICK] + #### ARCHIVIST How much longer? @@ -463,7 +465,7 @@ So would you say this was supposed to be Churchill or Alfred Hitchcock? #### ARCHIVIST -Jowls like that, could be either. I mean, the _[unintelligible]_ is a bit -- *Tim!* Leave it! +Jowls like that, could be either. I mean, the suit is a -- *Tim!* Leave it! #### TIM @@ -479,7 +481,7 @@ Are you sure it's through there? #### ARCHIVIST -I, I, I, I'm *pretty* sure. I saw it a few times while I was here, they've knocked through most of the middle, ho-hollowed it out, made a sort of auditorium. +I-I-I-I'm *pretty* sure. I saw it a few times while I was here, they've knocked through most of the middle, ho-hollowed it out, made a sort of auditorium. #### BASIRA @@ -495,7 +497,7 @@ I mean, it's not a huge building. #### ARCHIVIST -I __don't know__. Tonight was my first time seeing it from the outside. At least in the... flesh. I guess it does seem, m, smaller? +I __don't know__. Tonight was my first time seeing it from the outside. At least in the... flesh. I guess it does seem... smaller? ##### [Silence.] @@ -505,13 +507,13 @@ You're sure this is the right place? #### ARCHIVIST -I *am*. This is definitely where they kept me. Although I don't remember quite this many waxworks. +I *am*. This is definitely where they kept me. Although I don't remember... quite this many waxworks. #### BASIRA -Alright. I just don't want to get this far and find out we're in a -- +Alright. I just don't wanna get this far and find out we're in a -- -##### [She's cut off by a strange music seeming to come from the other side of the door.] +##### [She is cut off by strange music seeming to come from the other side of the door.] #### ARCHIVIST @@ -525,7 +527,7 @@ We need to see what's going on in there. #### ARCHIVIST -Just ignore it. We have a job to do. +Just ignore it. We have a *job* to do. #### BASIRA @@ -541,15 +543,15 @@ It moved. #### ARCHIVIST -Right, okay, if they're starting to, ah, We've got to go. +*Right*, okay, if they're starting to, ah, We've got to go. #### BASIRA -No, like -- it was just -- it's just a flicker in his eyes. Look at it -- +No, like- it was just- it's just a flicker in his eyes. Look at this -- #### ARCHIVIST -Don't -- Look, if the waxworks are coming alive, we *need* to go. +Don't- Look, if the waxworks are coming alive, we *need* to go. #### BASIRA @@ -571,7 +573,7 @@ What do you -- Christ. #### ARCHIVIST -Tim, I -- I think -- I think maybe we had better see what's going on in there. +Tim, I- I think- I think maybe we had better see what's going on in there. #### TIM @@ -579,13 +581,9 @@ Alright. Alright. On three. _(pause)_ Three. ##### [They open the door. The music grows louder.] -#### ARCHIVIST - -Oh... - #### TIM -Holy -- +Oh, holy- #### ARCHIVIST @@ -625,7 +623,7 @@ What the hell is that thing? What's it doing to them? I, I think -- I used to call it The Anglerfish. It's -- I knew it took the skin, used it to coat people made of sawdust and stuffing, but now -- I suppose I thought it just *ate* the rest. But no. It had a museum to fill with waxworks. And I guess you don't need skin to sing. _(shaky breath)_ To join the choir. -##### [TAPE CLICKS OFF.] +##### [CLICK] ------ @@ -633,7 +631,7 @@ I, I think -- I used to call it The Anglerfish. It's -- I knew it took the skin, ##### [INT. ARCHIVES] -##### [TAPE CLICKS ON.] +##### [CLICK] #### MARTIN @@ -663,7 +661,7 @@ _(sighing)_ Are you done. #### MARTIN -*Not* even *close.* Because, I -- _(composes himself)_ I've been thinking. It's not like you got this all-seeing thing recently. You've had it the whole time. I remember the way you looked at Sasha after the attack. You *knew* it wasn't her. And I reckon you knew Prentiss was lurking under the Institute, too, and you did nothing. Why? +*Not* even *close.* Because, I -- _(composes himself)_ I've been thinking. It's not like you got this all-seeing thing recently. You've had it the whole time. I remember the way you looked at Sasha after the attack. You *knew* it wasn't her. And I reckon you knew Prentiss was lurking under the Institute, too, and you did *nothing*. Why? ##### [Beat.] @@ -735,7 +733,7 @@ It's not your fault, though I know that isn't any consolation. Just bad luck, re The thing is, though, Martin. If you ever *do* want to know *exactly* what your father looked like... All you have to do is look in a mirror. -##### [Martin's breathing grows louder and shakier. There's a vague static in the background, still.] +##### [Martin's breathing grows louder and shakier. There is a rsing pitch in the background.] #### ELIAS @@ -771,7 +769,7 @@ Did you find anything? Uh, yes, I found -- -##### [She finally looks up and sees the state Martin's in.] +##### [She looks up and sees the state Martin's in.] Jesus. Are you okay? @@ -781,7 +779,7 @@ Do we have what we need? #### MELANIE -I think so, yes. He didn't even have a safe, just a few locked drawers. It was -- it was easy. +I think so, yes. He didn't even have a safe, just a few locked drawers. It was- it was easy. ##### [Martin takes a shaky breath.] @@ -795,7 +793,7 @@ We need to kill him. Look at you. He needs to __die__. #### MARTIN -No. No, I -- I knew what this was gonna be. +No. No, I- I knew what this was gonna be. #### MELANIE @@ -813,7 +811,7 @@ Melanie. Melanie, please. Alright. Let's get these somewhere safe. -##### [TAPE CLICKS OFF.] +##### [CLICK] ------ @@ -833,11 +831,11 @@ We *can't* help them. #### TIM -So, what, we're just going to *leave them* to be *skinned alive*? +What, so we're just going to *leave them* to be *skinned alive*? #### ARCHIVIST -_(overlapping)_ [And] what do you want me to do?! +_(overlapping)_ [Well] what do you want me to do?! #### TIM @@ -869,7 +867,7 @@ No! You *knew* I might not be coming back -- #### ARCHIVIST -I knew *none* of us might be coming back, and I'm not going to let anyone get killed for nothing! +I knew *none* of us might be coming back, and I'm not going to let anyone get killed for *nothing*! #### TIM @@ -997,4 +995,4 @@ Daisy! ##### [Something is slammed, or hit.] -##### [The circus music continues for a few seconds before fading out into the Magnus Archives theme.] \ No newline at end of file +##### [The circus music continues for a few seconds before fading out into the Magnus Archives theme.]