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-# Discovery of Agents, Workloads, and Named entities (DAWN)
-
-Many distributed processing environments depend on the interaction
-between components that do not have pre-configured capability,
-location, or reachability relationships. In order for these components
-to operate correctly, the components must be able to discover each
-other. For complete generality, we call these components "entities".
-Entities may be AI agents, software, services, endpoints, tasks,
-workloads, etc.
-
-The principle use case of this working group will be focusing on how
-an entity (a device or software, including but not limited to an AI
-agent) connected to a network can find available AI agents and how to
-contact them about their specific capabilities.  The entity will need
-to discover the agent's specific properties before proceeding: what
-type of agent are they, what communication protocols options are
-available, what services do they offer, and what information schemes
-they support.  Additional more detailed metadata may be communicated
-as well, such as how many tokens it can support, whether it is
-reactive or proactive, whether it depends on a particular model, and
-what data it needs as input.
-
-To support these goals, an interoperable and generic discovery
-mechanism is needed that builds on existing protocols and tools,
+# Discovery of Agents With Names (DAWN)
+
+Agentic AI systems depend upon the interaction between an entity (a 
+device or software, including but not limited to an AI agent) and an
+AI agent.  For this to work, the entity must find available AI agents
+and learn how to contact them about their specific capabilities.
+
+The focus this working group will be on how an entity can discover an
+agent's specific properties before proceeding: what type of agent they
+are, what their reachability information is, what communication protocols 
+options are available, what services do they offer, and what information 
+schemes they support.  Additional more detailed metadata may be communicated
+as well, or may be left out of scope for direct capabilities exchange between 
+entity and AI agent.
+
+To support these goals, the working group will specify an interoperable
+and generic discovery mechanism that builds on existing protocols and tools,
 benefits from established trust models, supports proven delegation and
 federation architectures, and allows organisations to independently
 publish discovery information.
 
 ## Scope
 
-Discovery in the DAWN context is limited to being able to "find me an
+Discovery in the DAWN context is limited to "find me an
 agent to interact with" within an organization, within collaborating
-organizations or within local networks.  This may include
+organizations, or within local networks.  This may include
 communication about the following example attributes:
 
 - What is the agent's type and classification?
 - What communication and security protocols does the agent support?
-- What is the minimum requirements for information exchange?
+- What are the minimum requirements for information exchange?
 
 Where possible, any solutions work will be built in a modular way
 using existing IETF protocols that provide support for any needed
 communication, authentication and privacy. The WG will consider mDNS
-and DNS as potential initial contact mechanisms upon which to build a
-discovery protocol, but may examine other solutions as well.
+and DNS as potential mechanisms upon which to build a discovery protocol,
+but may examine other solutions as well.
 
 Although initially focused on discovery of AI agents, agentic tools,
 and agentic skills, the WG should strive to produce results that are
 general and reusable within other discovery contexts if possible.
 
 ## Out of Scope
 
-Specifically out of scope of the DAWN WG during its initial launch,
-includes:
+Specifically out of scope of the DAWN WG during its initial phase are:
 
-- Bulk transfer of larger capabilities beyond the minimal
-  establishment requirements.
+- Bulk transfer of more capability information beyond the minimal
+  requirements to establish communications.
 - All communication between entities beyond the initial discovery process.
+- Discovery across the wider Internet.
 - Agentic AI stable identifiers 
 - Entity registration within discovery servers
 - Discovery of discovery servers.
-- How is the interoperable information schema extensible?
-- What attestation evidence and results are available, if any, for the agent? 
+- How the interoperable information schema is made extensible.
+- Availability of attestation evidence and results for agents. 
 
 Future DAWN or other WG charters may consider taking on these tasks.
 
 ## Deliverables
 
-The DAWN working group will work on the following deliverables,
-roughly in this order:
+The DAWN working group will work on the following deliverables:
 
-- Terminology: A document defining common DAWN terminology for use in
-  the other DAWN documents (Optionally published as Informational or
-  included in the Architecture document).
+- Terminology: The definition of common DAWN terminology for use in
+  the other DAWN documents. (May be published as an Informational RFC or
+  included in the Architecture document.)
 
 - Discovery Architecture: A document describing the problem space,
-  requirements and the resulting DAWN architecture (Informational).
+  requirements, and the resulting DAWN architecture. (To be published
+  as an Informational RFC, but may be held until the Protocol work is
+  very stable.)
 
-- Use Cases: A document describing broad use case categories
-  (Optionally published as Informational).
+- Use Cases: A document describing broad use case categories.
+  (May be remain as an Internet-Draft informing other work or may be
+  published as an Informational RFC.)
 
-- Protocol: A specification defining the protocol semantics or
+- Protocol: A specification describing the applicability of existing
+  protocols and tools, and defining the protocol semantics or
   extensions developed to achieve the initial discovery goals within
-  the Discovery Architecture.
+  the Discovery Architecture. 
 
 ## Coordination with Other Working Groups and Organisations